Keep it strong and direct.
I've posted an article on the problems with weak prose at the following site:
Please check it out, and remember:To write well, you must work hard. To succeed in this tough gig, you mustn't be lazy.
Author and Freelance Editor of fiction, Lane Diamond, offers his views on the art and craft of writing fiction, on reading, and on any subjects relevant to the world of writing and the lives of authors.